Every sentence in this paragraph is correct. In this order the paragraph is still exhausting, because each one starts a brand-new subject and the reader has nowhere to hang it. Drag the sentences (or use the arrows) until each one opens with something the sentence before it supplied. The handoff report and the topic string update on every move.
Paragraph
Drag to reorder — the highlighted words are each sentence's opening arrows work too
Diagnose choppiness at the sentence opening, not the ending. When a paragraph feels disconnected, writers reach for more transition words. Read the first five or six words of each sentence instead. If those openings introduce something brand new every time, no connector will rescue the paragraph.
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Clean handoffs
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Reach-backs
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Cold starts
Topic string — the grammatical subjects, in order
Reader's report
Move a sentence and this panel will tell you what the reader experiences at that junction. Click any sentence to ask what its opening is pointing at.